Phil I have made the ammendments to the script because although I liked the idea of the fairy bumping into him, I have tried taking this section out and feel that now just having her land on him and then introducing the toadstool moving makes the story better. I have taken the section of the logs and tripping over the stone out completely. I have shortened the section of the tree but kept the fairy landing in the spider web because I like this demiss and remeber you agreeing on this in a previous comment.
Is the story calmed down enough now?
The Geriatric Toadstool Version 3
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