I have produced two versions with one slightly shorter with less gags I didn't think the story needed and finalised changes. I have also included the original because I don't know which one I prefer, I have completely changed Act three to keep the humorous gag tone throughout and think this is much stronger. Can you tell me if you feel the improvements work and if the story reads better or are there areas I need to finalise further?
Treatment for the Geriatric Toadstool 2
Treatment for the Geriatric Toadstool 2b